Read the sentence below about the Chicago fire of 1871.
Which revision is the best example of adding concrete
detail?
Claire Innes became separated from those she knew
during the fire and she later found them.
O Claire Innes became separated from her parents as
the flames spread through the city, and she later found
them.
O Claire Innes was separated from the people around
her during the fire and she later found them near the
same place they were separated.
O In the panic, Claire Innes was separated from her
family as they fled, and she was reunited with her
father after the fire was extinguished.
• In the panic, Claire Innes became separated from her
brothers and sisters during the fire and she later found
them after the fire was put out