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CAN SOMEONE PLEASE TELL ME WHAT TO CHANGE IN MY STARTING PARAGRAPH PLEASE
After an argument with his father, Greg runs off to an abandon building and finds a man named Lemon Brown. Together,
they take down a group of robbers trying to find Lemon Brown's treasure. When the robbers show up, Greg changes his
actions by showing bravery, calmness, nervousness, and scared. In this essay I will compare and contrast how Greg's
emotions change throughout the story.

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Emmaguidrygo
First of all, I think it’s very good but if I were you I would change on how Greg changed his actions, example “Greg goes and fights the robbers being very brave but calm at the same time. He showed on the outside that he was calm but in the inside he was nervous.”

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